Comments on: what do u think of my short story? http://www.patio-furniture-cushions.net/what-do-u-think-of-my-short-story Just another WordPress weblog Tue, 07 Sep 2010 01:18:45 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.1 By: Nannajill http://www.patio-furniture-cushions.net/what-do-u-think-of-my-short-story/comment-page-1#comment-4047 Nannajill Mon, 08 Feb 2010 16:48:17 +0000 http://www.patio-furniture-cushions.net/what-do-u-think-of-my-short-story#comment-4047 I am really impressed with your story. If you have some-one who could proof read for you it would help you a lot. It must have been very difficult to sustain the present tense, and the little thoughts and asides fit perfectly. I wish I could write like this. Well done. Tidy it up and send it off to an applicable magazine. Best wishes, Grandma Jill I am really impressed with your story. If you have some-one who could proof read for you it would help you a lot.

It must have been very difficult to sustain the present tense, and the little thoughts and asides fit perfectly.
I wish I could write like this. Well done.

Tidy it up and send it off to an applicable magazine.
Best wishes, Grandma Jill

]]> By: tennis_playa_01 http://www.patio-furniture-cushions.net/what-do-u-think-of-my-short-story/comment-page-1#comment-4048 tennis_playa_01 Mon, 08 Feb 2010 16:48:17 +0000 http://www.patio-furniture-cushions.net/what-do-u-think-of-my-short-story#comment-4048 i really enjoyed it. The twist at the end was a ripper, and i honestly think you have a future for short story writing..... NOT hahaha i really enjoyed it. The twist at the end was a ripper, and i honestly think you have a future for short story writing….. NOT hahaha

]]> By: JulieViolette http://www.patio-furniture-cushions.net/what-do-u-think-of-my-short-story/comment-page-1#comment-4049 JulieViolette Mon, 08 Feb 2010 16:48:17 +0000 http://www.patio-furniture-cushions.net/what-do-u-think-of-my-short-story#comment-4049 It needs work on the grammar and spelling. But it is a truly beautiful piece of writing because it comes from the depths of the feelings and thoughts in your heart and your mind. It portrays the sensitivity you have to living creatures and their innermost feelings and happenings. I genuinely love it. JulieViolette It needs work on the grammar and spelling.

But it is a truly beautiful piece of writing because it comes from the depths of the feelings and thoughts in your heart and your mind.

It portrays the sensitivity you have to living creatures and their innermost feelings and happenings.

I genuinely love it.

JulieViolette

]]> By: See how they run http://www.patio-furniture-cushions.net/what-do-u-think-of-my-short-story/comment-page-1#comment-4050 See how they run Mon, 08 Feb 2010 16:48:17 +0000 http://www.patio-furniture-cushions.net/what-do-u-think-of-my-short-story#comment-4050 Well, it needs some grammar and spelling revisions but it's a pretty fair bit of work. Read it over again and see where you might can improve it some. Think about how to visualize something and tell us how it looked. Keep writing. Well, it needs some grammar and spelling revisions but it’s a pretty fair bit of work. Read it over again and see where you might can improve it some. Think about how to visualize something and tell us how it looked. Keep writing.

]]> By: Elaine P http://www.patio-furniture-cushions.net/what-do-u-think-of-my-short-story/comment-page-1#comment-4051 Elaine P Mon, 08 Feb 2010 16:48:17 +0000 http://www.patio-furniture-cushions.net/what-do-u-think-of-my-short-story#comment-4051 Excellent descripiton. But a rather thin plot. Work on it a bit more. You have talent for writing. Excellent descripiton. But a rather thin plot. Work on it a bit more. You have talent for writing.

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