What do you think of it so far? I don’t care if there are grammar errors I will fix them later this is a rough draft. So what do you think so far? WHat could I do to make it better?
CHAPTER 1:
Indianapolis, Dayton, Columbus, Morgantown, Cumberland, Baltimore, Salisbury, The towns came and go, Callie not caring one bit, sulking, not saying a word while the rest of the family chatted about Blue Ridge, and how "great" it was supposed to be.
But to Callie, any place that does not have basketball can’t be great. Instead, Callie remembered all the wonderful times she had on the farm and on the court. Help delivering a cow, which she named Ellie, making the game winning basket at the state championship game, milking all the cows every morning, making the varsity team for the next year, which, now, she wouldn’t even get to play on, driving the tractor, walking across the soft earth barefoot, working in the fields all day, her dark farmers tan. She half-heartedly listened to her mother talking, and her sister asking questions about Blue Ridge.
"Mom, what time do classes start? Because you know I am not a morning person and can’t get up early, like Callie."
"All your classes are 1 and 15 minutes long, and you have 15 minutes between classes, and they start at nine, although you might not have one at nine, the schedule is like college, and you will have free periods."
"Oh, ok, thats still way to early though."
"So are you going to try out for any sports?"
"You know I hate sports!"
"What about you Callie? Are you going to do any sports?"
Callie ignored her, like she had been doing since she had to leave, letting her mother know how she felt about this new school.
As they entered Ocean City, Callie became more and more upset, reality sinking in, harder than ever. Her Future as a Basketball star, gone forever, her days at the farm, gone until June, fresh cow milk every morning, home grown produce, going barefoot, feeling the soft earth on the tough soles of her feet, all gone until June, the school holidays.
They pulled into the parking lot at Blue Ridge, and found the office soon afterward, and Callie sulked as her mother got her schedule, dorm assignment, and textbooks, and Jordyn got her own, as she was not uspet about Blue Ridge at all.
"This showed they truly were fraternal twins," Callie thought, "she was a country girl, and a hard core athlete. Jordyn, on the other hand, hated the country, was super girly, and hated sports. It seemed like the only thing they had in common was that their parents, teachers, and friends thought they were geniuses."
They had skipped the second grade, and STILL everyone thought they were geniuses, but Callie didn’t think that she was, she was constantly confused in school, and didn’t even get all a’s. She got all A’s in the off-season, but during basketball season it was all b’s. Callie didn’t get why everyone thought she was so smart, when she wasn’t, she wasn’t dumb, but she wasn’t smart either.
They walked across campus, her parents and Jordyn admiring the ocean view, Callie loving it, but not showng it. She refused to give her parents any satisfaction.
"What dorm are two in?" asked Mom. Callie sat her suitcase and backpack down on the bench, took off her sunglasses and pulled out the folder with her schedule and dorm assignment. "That One" Callie said moodily at exactly the same time Jordyn said the exact same thing excitedly, as they both pointed at the same steel building right in front of them. It was the Amanda L. Wilkins dorm. All Blue Ridge dorms were named after the first teachers, who taught in 1993, when the school opened.
Callie did have to admit the dorm did look cool, Steel with a Blue Door and trim, and lots and lots of windows, all the way up to 9th floor. They entered the building and immediately felt the rush of cold air from the air conditioning. They took the elevator up to the 6th floor, stopping at the 5th floor when a scrawny little girl who looked like she was a 6th grader, got out with her parents.
They reached their own dorm, opened the door, and found one other girl already there, putting clothes in the closet. There was a set of bunk beds in one end, and two twin beds at the other. Callie and Jordyn sat their stuff on the twin beds, and introduced themselves to the other girl, whose name turned out to be Elise. Callie noticed that all her clothes were from name brand stores, most with tags still on them, and all very new looking. She glanced at her suitcase, stuffed full with clothes, none of them new, all at least a year old.
They started putting some of their own things away, too. Elise finished when they were halfway done, she told them they would go look at the campus when they were done, this was her first year also, as she plopped down on the huge 5-cushion couch, next to Callie’s mom. The couch was ocean blue, just like the curtains, doors, bunk beds and trim.
One hour later, maps in hand, Callie, Jordyn, Elise walked out o
out of the dorm and onto the campus. Callie and Jordyn said good-bye to their parents, and promised to email on their new mac laptops every other day.
They walked around campus, seeing all the buildings, tennis courts, and the outdoor pool, as well as the gym and indoor pool. Callie felt a pang of sadness when they entered the gym, remembering her basketball dream. Tears welled up in her eyes, wishing with all her heart that Blue Ridge had a basketball team. I mean, they did have lots of sports teams, Volleyball, Football, Cross-Country, Wrestling, Boys Basketball, Swimming, Track and Field, Lacrosse, Soccer, Golf, Softball, Baseball, and Tennis, but no Girls Basketball team. With those thoughts in mind, especially the thought that the boys had a basketball team, made Callie start bawling, and she couldn’t stop, nothing Jordyn or Elise said could stop her.
They went back to their dorm, and Callie laid on her bed and cried and cried. Finally, she felt she could cry no more and sat up. She went and sat on the couch, next to Jordyn. Elise asked Callie if she was okay, and after Callie replied (I guess so…)
Callie started questioning Elise.
"So, do you play any sports?"
"Yeah, I played basketball last year, but obviously not anymore, but I will tryout for volleyball and softball, softball is my favorite sport"
The thought got Callie on the verge of tears again, but she held them back this time.
"What position do you play in basketball? I play point guard, and I was supposed to be the starter on the varsity team back in Wyoming."
"I also play point guard, but I was probably only going to be on Freshman or JV team back home"
The Threesome continued to talk, and found out that Elise was from Upstate New York. She had 3 brothers and 5 sisters. Her youngest brother, Jakob, and youngest sister, Edyn, went to public school in New York, and lived at home as they were too young to attend Blue Ridge. Jeremy, 11, lived in the Benjamin A. Huebsch dorm. Kaelyn was 12 and has Autism, so she goes to a special school in New York for Autistic children.
Her 13 year old sister Isabelle was in the Melissa D. Wible dorm. Living in the Adrienne L. Young dorm was her sister, Kristin. Off at college were Kylie and Mason, her oldest siblings.
Elise, Callie, and Jordyn went down to the Cafeteria, and had dinner, slices of pepperoni pizza, salad, and hot fudge sundaes. Full and tired, they went back to their dorm, the dorm door slamming behind them, waking the last roommate, who had appeard while they were at dinner.
"Why the hell did you dumb asses wake me up?" asked the roommate, who was dressed fully in black leatherhear long fingernails painted black, her dirty blonde hair, was dyed black, the very tips showing dirty blonde, proving it was dyed.
It is called "Shattered Dreams", I think, lol I haven’t decided.